A little school rivalry going there?
Anyway, my reaction is the same as it was for Steven's design - I think it could stand to be broken up a bit. I prefer the one with the green stripes over the first one, but still that large expanse of black undercheck is too much. Give vorapallemur's suggestion a go - swap the black and green stripes between the golds and try adding a narrow stripe down the middle at the very least.
As I alluded to in my review of the tartan designer, putting together a design that keeps everything in balance while still offering an appealing contrast is not as easy as it looks.
Regards,
Rex.
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